thank you, Steve; much appreciated. another commenter, as you can see, has taken me to task for the liberties I have taken in translation this week and I agree with him, but still think it's better this way, in English at least.
It is extremely difficult and demanding work to translate the weekly verses into a foreign language. That is why it is of course also justified to handle the texts very freely. Rudolf Steiner often spoke about translation in the sense that one should not translate the words, but that one must go to the origin, to the ideas of the source text and then translate the meaning into the other language. May I make a comment on this last translation.
You translate Empfindung with sentient soul, that's ok. In the 6th line it then says "sie gibt" "she gives" and by she is meant the sentient or sentient soul. The sentient soul gives or lends warmth to the thoughts which brings forth clarity (to sight).
I m a native German and English is only my second language and I m not sure whether I understood your text alright or whether my comment was necessary at all.
your point is duly noted and correct. I was wrestling with this and I finally opted to change it to its present form, which entailed a further departure from the original German. but I was much happier with the consistency of the image and mood of the verse as a whole in this formulation.
What became of all this. Why the tangent? Not you Max, of course. But, you see here, this is a means to allow the personal psychology to come forth. This can only be a step in the right direction. And our friend Ottmar pointed the way. I know him, and I am proud to know him for my English language narratives over many years. Bless this liturgy 4.
It is great to have a new creative translator of these verses. This week's
is especially thoughtful.
thank you, Steve; much appreciated. another commenter, as you can see, has taken me to task for the liberties I have taken in translation this week and I agree with him, but still think it's better this way, in English at least.
Maybe we could call yours an Inklings version, with English emphasized :)
haha fine by me
It is extremely difficult and demanding work to translate the weekly verses into a foreign language. That is why it is of course also justified to handle the texts very freely. Rudolf Steiner often spoke about translation in the sense that one should not translate the words, but that one must go to the origin, to the ideas of the source text and then translate the meaning into the other language. May I make a comment on this last translation.
You translate Empfindung with sentient soul, that's ok. In the 6th line it then says "sie gibt" "she gives" and by she is meant the sentient or sentient soul. The sentient soul gives or lends warmth to the thoughts which brings forth clarity (to sight).
I m a native German and English is only my second language and I m not sure whether I understood your text alright or whether my comment was necessary at all.
Anyway thank you for your work. Ottmar
your point is duly noted and correct. I was wrestling with this and I finally opted to change it to its present form, which entailed a further departure from the original German. but I was much happier with the consistency of the image and mood of the verse as a whole in this formulation.
What became of all this. Why the tangent? Not you Max, of course. But, you see here, this is a means to allow the personal psychology to come forth. This can only be a step in the right direction. And our friend Ottmar pointed the way. I know him, and I am proud to know him for my English language narratives over many years. Bless this liturgy 4.
I'm not sure I understand your comment but, sure, go ahead
"gallivants " is a splendid verb